20 September 2005

mayhem

music and love
love and life
life and death

prismatic beauty
intellectual acuity
soul penetration

precipice fingernails
200 feet per second
vertical chasm

sentimental torture
nervous exhaustion
emotional collapse

cerebral atrophy
arterial sclerosis
cardiac arrest

degrees of life
death by coma
flatline

22 comments:

RuKsaK said...

That's how I like me some poetry - fast and dangerous, plummeting. Good stuff and not a trace of anything twee - well done.

NMAMFQLMSH said...

Flatline...........shit.......I'll settle for a good nights sleep and a hug.

dAAve said...

having a bad day?

transience said...

damn, RuKsaK beat me to it. he's right. especially about the plummeting part. but i would treat myself to a freefall with that kind of poetry.

Trudging said...

Good Stuff

Perfect Virgo said...

Ruk - yes the emotions plummeting down the page in time with the sentiments. Thanks for your support.

JJ - much more realistic my friend. I tend to over-react!

HP - bad year. Blurting out the feelings helps though.

Trans - I am scared stiff of heights so plummeting is a dangerous word for me. I even avoided using it preferring to imply instead. Go on treat yourself!

Trudging - thanks for reading.

sirreene said...

PV it's a new year for you, remember? New insight perhaps...or I'm going to have to come over there and give a birthday spanking personally ;)

Perfect Virgo said...

Sirreene - I do indeed remember! But I'm a creature of habit, I plough the same furrow and I'm useless at changing! I'll try and make some exploratory forays into virgin territory but you'll often find me scurrying back to the familiar old routine!

Spank away if you can reach, I put my special birthday suit on!

sirreene said...

take it off, tomorrow's HNT ;)

Perfect Virgo said...

Sirreene - birthday suit equals clothes you were born in... So I'm already ready!

Grace said...

Hey I didnt know it was your birthday yesterday! HAppy Birthday mate! Did you have a good one? :-)

Perfect Virgo said...

Grace - Thanks! Monday 19th, a late virgo. I had a quiet day, took it easy at work and lounged by the TV in the evening! Going out for a meal next weekend.

sirreene said...

I know what birthday suit is:, I want to see the picture...where is it bdayman? put the body where the words are!

Perfect Virgo said...

Sirreene - I know you know! I am just being all coy and bashful. You don't really want to see the last turkey in the shop all trussed up!

finnegan said...

euphoria
ecstasy
delight
pleasure
interest
curiosity
ambivalence
indifference
disappointment
sadness
grief
misery
despair


I had to go back to that vertical stack which you'd earlier built for

LEAPING

This parallel tower
of emotional power
had my veins opened
up and

SEEPING

Cocaine Jesus said...

a fast poem that rang like a powerchord. muscular and sparse and brutal.

Perfect Virgo said...

Finn - thanks for climbing the parallel tower for a second view.

CJ - scraping away as many words as possible seems to me the key to leaving the remainder as concentrated as possible.

Pat said...

PV- What is the main cause of this progression? Perhaps it can be reversed sooner than you think!

Perfect Virgo said...

Pat - general unhappiness with life about sums it up. I am going through some tough changes as I think I mentioned, writing is a kind of therapy. Love and friendship are key worries which I am working hard on. Expect improvement!

Patry Francis said...

"Expect improvement." Two of the most beautiful words in the English language. Beaming good thoughts, P.V.

Perfect Virgo said...

Patry - afore-mentioned beamed good thoughts successfully received. Thanks my friend, I am trying.

GEL said...

Love this piece!
charged,dangerous,hanging by a thread, and written w/ the speed of an invisible shot out of or into hell-
(Far more effective than my current "Havoc")
I shall re-read this several times. I choose to believe it will help me from catapulting over the edge. Thanks